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<br />The first time I walked<br /><br />
With a girl, I was twelve,<br />
Cold, and weighted down<br />
With two oranges in my jacket.<br />
December. Frost cracking<br />
Beneath my steps, my breath<br />
Before me, then gone,<br />
As I walked toward<br />
Her house, the one whose<br />
Porch light burned yellow<br />
Night and day, in any weather.<br />
A dog barked at me, until<br />
She came out pulling<br />
At her gloves, face bright<br />
With rouge. I smiled,<br />
Touched her shoulder, and led<br />
Her down the street, across<br />
A used car lot and a line<br />
Of newly planted trees,<br />
Until we were breathing<br />
Before a drugstore. We<br />
Entered, the tiny bell<br />
Bringing a saleslady<br />
Down a narrow aisle of goods.<br />
I turned to the candies<br />
Tiered like bleachers,<br />
And asked what she wanted -<br />
Light in her eyes, a smile<br />
Starting at the corners<br />
Of her mouth. I fingered<br />
A nickel in my pocket,<br />
And when she lifted a chocolate<br />
That cost a dime,<br />
I didn't say anything.<br />
I took the nickel from<br />
My pocket, then an orange,<br />
And set them quietly on<br />
The counter. When I looked up,<br />
The lady's eyes met mine,<br />
And held them, knowing<br />
Very well what it was all<br />
About.<br />
<br />
Outside,<br />
A few cars hissing past,<br />
Fog hanging like old<br />
Coats between the trees.<br />
I took my girl's hand<br />
In mine for two blocks,<br />
Then released it to let<br />
Her unwrap the chocolate.<br />
I peeled my orange<br />
That was so bright against<br />
The gray of December<br />
That, from some distance,<br />
Someone might have thought<br />
I was making a fire in my hands.My Comments.<br /> - Avg. rating:
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Comments (19 Comments)
- PrinZ3 - 02/15/2011
- and making wrong statement for hatred is such a foolish thing to do...do a favor...keep ur mouth shut
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- PrinZ3 - 02/15/2011
- Speak for urself young lady!see ur reflection at the mirror first before u say something that is idiot and rubbish. Yes i do admit i deleted some of the comment but yet i stilll ALLOWS other to post their criticsm...but on the other U, MIssy dun even allows people to leave comment,n yet u still critic about other people deleting omments? dun u think that's a little childish?Shame on u! get a life
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- Maldoria - 07/21/2010
- Thanks for the comment on Yunnie :3 it made me really happy that you liked it because before I submitted it I was shaking in my booties thinking that people would be angry it was 'another yuna' hehe. I'm glad you liked it though wink
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- I wish I could come to understand you better. Maybe it would help me wrap my mind around why people can be so rude and not blink an eye at being so. Other than being entirely cruel, but I doubt this is the case with you.
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- Even a bit of agreement with her. I still like my Kukaku though. She's a fun character that I enjoyed trying to put together, even though it's obviously not perfect. As for your comment on me being selfish, I really don't know what to say. The arenas for me is really selfish. It's just me making avatars I like and that's pretty much it. *shrugs* I don't see what the point of bringing it to my attention, though? Another attempt to make me look poor? You claim it's not what you're doing...
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- I have accused you of nothing but being a rude jerk. I have only mentioned that it would appear to some that you have other intentions. And why do you continue to bring others in to the equation? Like numbers some how make you more right than me? As we have established several times now, it is an opinion. Of course, others will have it. But when you showed me the critiquing page, I felt nothing at all. Not even the want to respond to it. I was truly indifferent.
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