Just mah little intro

• Artist: SvenHollintre
• Description: Just the prologue for my story, Everything Happens for a Reason.
• Date: 02/20/2009
• Tags: just little intro

None of us 4 know why our parents made us their lab rats... we all have our own hypothesizes, although we all know that they are wrong. Jack thinks we weren’t experimented on by our own parents, because parents would not do that, while Lukas and I think that they were paid a great sum of money. Sofie thinks that they worked for some kind of Neo-Nazi group. I guess I should explain a lot more to you. First off, there is 6 of us (“us” being the mutants), yours truly, Klaus Sebastian von Luthenstein, there’s my half sister, Sofie Nikolaus Brüke, there’s my sister, Elena Yorrick Luthenstein, my brother, Leon Johannes Luthenstein, and finally my 2 best friends, Lukas Jacques Hapmanc and Jack Rudin Donvaloski. I could never live without those 5 people. They have brought me through thick and thin, grease and gristle. They are my family. I am 17 years old, Elena is 16, Leon is 27 Sofie is 18, Jack is 16, and Lukas is 17 also. We live in a big palace that our parents built for us before they died, or in my grandparents’ words, “Took a trip to climb K2 and never returned”. Anyway, there is so much that we don’t know, I don’t even know if these are our real names. Anyway, what was I saying? Oh yeah, what they did to us... THEY TURNED US INTO WERE WOLVES!!!!!!!!

Comments

[vintyy]

this is more like a text than actual writing
use spell check/grammar/and less NUMBERS

[-Deathly Destruction-]

I second zweit's comments.

[Zweit]

It would help if it was formatted a little better then just one giant lump of text. Spell out numbers instead of just punching them in. Try to make your sentences flow more. It gets really choppy towards the end.

The end sentence could be done much better. Simply shouting it out is...fail.