Areza is not innocent

• Artist: wintericegirl
• Description: areza hurts someone
• Date: 04/15/2009
• Tags: areza innocent

Lightning brightened the room Tyler walked over to the wall to see a girl with long black hair on a chair crying under the chair there was scattered blood.A..Areza?Whats wrong?I didnt mean two they were just inocent people and I thought they were trying to hurt me so I hurt them.Tyler glanced to the side to see two bodies under them a pool of red blood.Tyler chan Midnight ran in the room o my she said.Midnight san I hurt them I hurt them badly.

Areza why why.Its not her fault I understand Tyler said.Understand what Areza Areza youre a killer.Midnight san Areza said please dont tell anyone.Come on Areza tyler said I will help you up here wipe those tears off your faceAreza were friend and friends are friends so dont worry I wont tell anyone.Midnight san!(areza starts crying and hugs Midnight)but Midnight Im sorry Im sorry I didnt know.Its ok Areza.

Comments

[Necrotoxin Assassin]

tis not too bad but good to use punctuation like quotation marks ("" wink so you can understand who is talking and to make the piont or story line more clear
and to use a more vast range of descriptive words for the
right object or subject you are trying to portray or descibe
just some constructive critisizm ^^'
like i said not too bad
3/5