Moments

• Artist: miyu_yuki
• Description: This is a poem I wrote about how many people may view life. Any constructive criticism is greatly appreciated.
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: life

Have you ever taken the moment
To simply stop and hear
The thoughts of those you truely love
Their dreams and hopes and fears

Have you ever taken the moment
To look up at the sky
To allow your troubles to fade away
And not always question "why"

Have you ever taken the moment
To voice how you really feel
To not always say "yes" to others
And to live through your own will

Have you ever taken the moment
To feel the warmth of the sun
To let the rays pass through your soul
And to accept that the past is done

Have you ever taken the moment
To enjoy the taste of bliss
To tear down the walls around you
And leap in the unknown abyss

Have you ever taken the moment
To gaze upon the stars
Because each one of these moments
Forms the person that you are.

Comments

[FaithEmblem]

It has good structure, but for it to be "how many people view life" it only spoke of how you should take moments to reflect on the goodness of the past, how it's molded you.
Besides the description being a little off, I enjoyed this poem biggrin Good job.

[Convoluted Logic]

Hey guess what :]
Troubles don't fade away. O:

[Cemhta]

hmm pretty cool =)
it seems youre a shy person dont know why..