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• Artist: Talk_To_Trolls
• Description: I did this two years ago in the eighth grade, after I was completely heartbroken because of a boy. This was my first attempt at poetry EVER, and I believe it turned out better than I expected.
  I actually showed it to the guy after I wrote it, and he got pretty upset about it and told me to stop writing poems about him..even though this was actually my first ever poem. Yeah, he was weird. >.<
  
  I hope you like it! ^-^
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: love heartbreak breakup depression angst

You eye them like you once eyed me
You look at her like you used to look at me
And I watch so helplessly
As my world caves in around me.
I just wanted you
I wanted you to want me too...
I guess I was too blind to see
You didn't really love me...
How you looked at them
And I could see happiness in your eyes
Something I couldn't bring you,right?
I love you
But since we're through I'll hold on to
a dream that will never come....

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Comments

[ksimalwyz]

Your a firstie?? wow... i'm impressed. Keep writing definately. Write from your heart. never fails!

[Sesskogaru]

awwwwwwwwwww!!! That is so sad yet cute. ^^ Very good first attempt. wink

[Hikaru1214]

good...-_-

[Moriah-Beth]

this was such a good poem.. i wish i could write like you

[Schizophrenic Angel]

It's a pretty good poem, I think as you came to the end of it you really let your creative side show. The beginning seemed like you forced the rhymes, but as the ending came the natural beat came out and the rhymes flowed easily.

[Talk_To_Trolls]

=)