Evil Poem

• Artist: Generic Individual
• Description: A pure description of what an author can do to you while you read a poem. It's a trip through your imagination.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: evil poem awsome chuck norris

I am here
You are there
We are here
Everywhere
Now we're gone
Far and wide
We're how you feel
Deep inside
Now your lost
Eternal sleep
I have your soul
Mine to keep
Now I enter
Inside your head
I destroy your mind
Now your dead
I have won
I always do
But there is something
I must do
You are there
Your mind is on
Where am I
I am gone

Comments

[parvanirose]

Should be "Now you're lost" and "Now you're dead". 4/5 though. It's good otherwise.

[ElectraShocked]

really good, but I didn't really know what it was about untill I read your description. Address what it's about somewhere in the poem maybe....?
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[Generic Individual]

Not all poetry has a set rhythm. But that's not the point. It does. Try again.

[Okami Nanashi]

Needs a rythm

[Generic Individual]

> >; o-o;

[jellyfied123]

ok then