This Moment

• Artist: Shadow_Hexis
• Description: This isn't one of my best works but I submited it anyway to get feedback. Something sad I wrote radomly one day. The first few words of each verse repeat to add affect.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: thismoment fear mother time

Don't you wish at this moment,
That you had listened just once,
To your mother's warnings of night perils and such.

Don't you wish at this hour,
That you weren't laying in the woods,
To your dismay alone and confused.

Don't you wish at this minute,
That you weren't staring at this man,
To your great fear staring back.

Don't you wish at this second,
That you couldn't see your thoart being slit,
To your shocking ending without even a scream.

Don't you wish at this instance,
That you could see her again,
To your mother you would run and hold instead.

Comments

[Tewr]

I like it. It's very unique.

[Jen In Wonderland]

Epic.<3

[J 0 Y Z]

So sad and it does add an effect, dramatically too. ^^

[OMGLAVASAUR]

First........scary!

[ekitten614]

That's really great, I'd love to see your best works! I love the story and how the first few words are repeated. Awesome!