Lullaby

• Artist: f a l l e t e
• Description: Written with no set meter or rhyming scheme in mind. For the musical ones out there, I wrote it while humming a soft melody in A major. Thoughts?
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: love heartbeat innocent lullaby melody

Hush,
It’s a lullaby,
Can’t you hear it singing?

Can’t you hear
The distant beat,
Of my heart,
In time with yours?

Hush,
It's a lullaby,
Rocking you to sleep,
It's a melody
So swift and soft,
Innocently singing

And when it stops,
I’ll close my eyes,
And you’ll wake up –
Alone,
So hush,
It’s a lullaby,
Here for only you.

Comments

[A Taste of Fate]

honestly, i liked it. the words. u r right bout the no rhythm. but the words are good. to me the flow into one another...if you want to write something else like that and make it like a song, try coming up w/ a original melody first then try to put the words w/ it. if it doesnt fit then you might have to change a few things. anyway, i hope that helps. thts what i do when i write. so i think its good...

[BoomBot Ninja]

Its good. Obviously, this is a poem you can entirely grasp yourself, but it may be harder for others to "get it". Next time, try adding a rhythm meter or a rhyme scheme. I'd like to read it!
3/5! x3

[12Namine16]

U your right about it having no rhythm what so ever and it's not that good either but.....2/5 I guess for making sense and trying.

[Fredella]

it's alright I guess

[Meth Related Nightmare]

Lullaby's are traditionally sing songy, so for it's tittle I didn't really like it.