Poison

• Artist: dark demon53
• Description: Simply a poem I wrote, I got some people to read it, and they liked...So now I wanted to know what the gaia community thinks of it.
• Date: 09/28/2008
• Tags: poison

It burns me, hurts me, breaks me, kills me.
But yet, it makes me feel so free.
It makes me cry, and makes me want to die.
So killer, yet so harmless.
It's screwing with my systems, making me a mess.
It's so toxic, it's so potent.
It's all the toxics man.
It's nuero, hemo, sero, it's so fun.
It's all the poisons all rolled into one.
It's poisonous, it's toxic, it's deadly all and all.
Knocks me out, hits me hard, then I start to fall.
Deadlier than demons.
Purer than the sky.
Hits hard enough to kill me.
This is how I feel, I need you to know.
I'm talking about this misery,
Everything it does to me.
I want to tell you all about it.
Im ready for the hit.
So come on honey, bite me.
Inject me with the poison of your love.

Comments

[DandiiBrandii]

I love it. Its really nice and descriptive. smile
Vote back? wink

[Renesme]

I like it! kinda wierd but good! 5/5

[Wolfina Sarnata]

Truly a work of art.
5/5!

[dark demon53]

Thank you all. But to be honest, I dont think my poetry is good...Yes, I noticed I repeated toxic and poison, but ya know, I thought it went well and fit well. Thanks for the comments and votes. I might post more later, but Im not sure...I wasnt exactly sure about the title, and I picked Poison, because people usually look for poems of love or pain. But anyway, thanks for commenting and voting.

[Cli0dna]

I love it =) And no, the words didn't repeat themselves at all.

[Driak-Lang]

great but you repeted some word too many time (toxic,poison)

[Raining Rainbow Skittles]

I really like this. I'm rating 5/5 . You're so poetic. smile