Interpreting the Tears

• Artist: kryptic_valiance
• Description: An amateur poem by me.
  I was feeling really bad so I decided to make a poem to touch everyone else's hearts and inspire a change in the world, starting with Gaia.
  I guess it's dedicated to all the people who have experinced or is experiencing suffering. Like the victims of 9/11 and Virginia Tech and Columbine or Katrina, the earthquake in China, and all other tragedies.
• Date: 10/06/2008
• Tags: tears sadness interpret thought message

Tears

When one is struck with a feeling of digrace,
Or is facing one of their worst fears,
They convey an emotion which runs down their face,
In the form of dismal tears.

Tears can express your sadness,
Tears can express your pain,
Tears can express your madness,
Your suffering, your shame.

Tears can mean your pity,
Tears can mean your woe,
Tears can mean your misery,
Your sorrow, and no hope.

Tears represent your depression,
Tears represent your unhappiness,
Tears represent your oppression,
Your anguish and your gloominess.

Tears have other interpretations,
But listen to what I say,
Get up and abandon your desolation,
And wipe those tears away.

Comments

[i_MzDorkiie1337]

So true and one of my of my best friends moved to china and she died in that earthquake. I was devistated when I found out I cried for probly about 6 months or so.....

[GoldenServent612]

that's very creative and lovely. 10/10 I wuv it!!!

[HUMIDIFIER]

what is here that hasn't already been said? this poem was old before you even typed it. the rhyming just made it more irritatingly sing-songy for a poem that, if written in a way to convey meaning, would not want to sound that way. there's nothing to "inspire a change" here. my praise is that it's written in a way that can be read, which is better than many posts here.

[Dark Serraphim]

It seems to me that this is a lot like lyrics. I think it works really well. The fourth stanza is a little heavy compared to the rest of it, but if it is meant for a song rather than a poem, it could work just fine.
You forgot the "s" in disgrace in the first line. ^_^ Great work--very nice poem and very nice job!

[weezieishness]

Yeah I agree there's a little too much repetition. But it flows well, and I rather like it.

[Monokuro No Yume]

... I do understand poetic 'repetition', but even so I can't help but think that you said 'tear/s' a few too many times in that poem.
Besides that, I think it's very good. And I really can't count that, because that's probably just me being stupid.
I can really see the poem and really like it, but even so I can't say I love it. 4/5

[tksunshine93]

extremely good...
i think the repetition gives it a very approachable, realistic feel.
the beginning really sort of saddened me but once i got to the end i knew why you had waited to throw in the hope aspect.
i LOVE it!! 5/5