Blurred Vision

• Artist: cry_crimson666
• Description: This is a poem i have written for the people who have difficulty seeing their own true bueaty and peoples perception that has been distorted by todays idealistic world! Hope you like it. I am not to good with spelling so just bear with me ok =) Thanks
• Date: 10/13/2008
• Tags: blurred vision

Look and See
Dissorted
What you dont see is the reality,
What you do is a fractured heart trying hard to beat and see
the Bueaty i see.
Dont beleive what you see
turn around
to another mirror
A better mirror
to help you see even though you have
Blurred vision.
It may seem Impossible to you but not to me,
I just see clearly
What is real,
What true bueaty is
what you are.

Comments

[OhDearie]

I love this poem, however, there are things I have to point out to you.
You should run spell-check before you submit, I see many errors in the piece.
Also, don't capatalise randomly, like what you did with the 'See' and the 'Bueaty' (and the 'i' after it isn't capatalised!). if you need to emphasise it, make it bold or underlined.
Also, you need punctuation in there.

'What you do is a fractured heart trying to beat and see' doesn't work.
why is a 'do' there?