Death

• Artist: blazewing76
• Description: i did feel like i died, probably would have killed myself when i got home, the lady i spoke of in here hurt me far to bad. i guess writing this kept me alive.
• Date: 11/06/2008
• Tags: death

Here I lie.
I am just 2100 years old.
I have had many Names.
For my life I have fought and never lost.
This time is the end.
My Wings Clipped by my mate of 600 years.
At first I did not mind.
She showed me something that I though I had lost.
I smile yet she betrayed me.
I lie here dying again.
This time I will not survive.
The wound...A hole in my chest.

I see my life passing before me.
My mates, my son.
I hear a sad crooning.

It is my son.
Though I cannot see, I know he is here.
Holding my head in his lap.
I feel Diamonds tears falling on me.
He is A miniature of me
He whispers "daddy don’t die,I love you."
We normally accept and welcome death
Still he cries.

Though he is here.
Alone I am still.
No one to turn to
No one to be here to heal this wound
Alone I am.

The death blow...dealt to me but the sword held by my silver mate.
The Sword...I gave her as a gift...she used it to end my life.

All is dark.
So this is death?

Comments

[Phantom Mutt]

i really liked it. its very descriptive. i know the feeling of having a loved one hurt u... if u wouldnt mind id like to read the original

[Farrelei]

I'd be interested to hear the original, but clipping parts out and altering things is all a part of poetry.

Such a great story, thank you for allowing me to read this. Some parts could be better, but I thoroughly enjoyed this. Nice work with the paragraphing as well.
4/5

[Crimi_chan300]

Wow these poems you wrote were amazing, and unique. I can really picture in my mind the story, as I read it.
I love this
5/5 biggrin

[tksunshine93]

I like story line.Very well written.

[blazewing76]

so you know i wrote this in a sad time. I cipped out a few pieces to make it,less descriptive i have the original. if you want to read it let me know