The Moon

• Artist: summer_lilies
• Description: Please be honest but nice! This was written when I was a bit of an insomniac. XP
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• Date: 11/19/2008
• Tags: moon

The moon casts a lengthy shadow for me.
I can barely sleep...or wake from this dream,
And I know long nights are only ahead,
I'll live the life of an insomniac
For many days to come.

The moon, hiding behind clouds, hints it sees
That normality is not what it seems.
Innocence, I crave that, but even I
Know the night has tainted me. I've become
Innocent no longer.

The moon provides a soft light, but it's cold
And will not provide comfort to this soul.
If only there were someone to share nights
Like this one with, a fellow wanderer
And a kindred spirit.

The moon reveals the perfect atmosphere
To reminisce and lose myself like this,
And as the wind blows, an insomniac
I've become, captured by the moon, either
By its beauty or dread.

Comments

[Anna Kakuzawa]

Hmmm I suggest to keep the words "and" and "the" out of your poems as much as possible. It allows the poem to run along much more smoothly. smile

Could you comment/rate back?

[IDK my BFF Voldie]

You're a bit repetitive. Sometimes repetition is good, but not here.
But I'll be honest. This is a tidit better than all the crap I normally see here.