Don't Trust The Dove-Man

• Artist: Galindafied1
• Description: Sounds like a funny title, but it's sad poem. ('cept for you sadistic freaks.)
  I was hit by an inspiration arrow. Did my best to keep iambic pentameter and keep a rhyme scheme up. I like it. x3 But, then again, I wrote it.
• Date: 12/04/2008
• Tags: dont trust doveman

A snowy morning in mid-December
I went outside to find a dove
White as white and I still remember
How the bird gazed at me with love

A bird can't gaze, or so they said,
But, I gazed back, thinking I was dreaming
Soon, I realized I was not and wished to return to bed
But as I turned, the dove called out, "Things are not as they are appearing."

At first I believed myself insane
And quickly ran into the house
But, when I went back to look out the window pane,
The dove was still watching, quiet now as a mouse

The bird was waiting, or so it appeared
But what was he waiting for?
So, I went outside again, insanity, though, I still feared
The bird, I expected to take to the sky and soar

But, no, not this bird.
He swooped down from the tree, and turned into a man.
I felt as though I would wake up, but it was no dream, that he assured.
Tall, clothed in white, handsome as could be, and for winter, he had a nice tan.

He came to me and got on one knee
And pulled out a ring
Certainly this surprised me
But, what could I say? He made my heart sing.

I married the dove-man the very next day
We lived together for many years
Until he drove me into tears

I was not the only one the dove came for
I was the tenth, and many more came
He made a woman's heart soar
Until she grew to feel the same

He hides us away
And never lets us go
He hurts us every way
Expecting us to stay

When we die, he burns our memory
And no one sees us again
For all of us who suffered, I am sorry
Don't fall for the dove, the horror of men

He'll hurt you, destroy you
Til nothing be left over
Then he'll kill you, spill blood and forget you
No one will find you, ever

And forever you will lay away
Some place I don't even know
Just as we do, and wait for him to come back and say:
"Your time is up. I've come to steal you today."

Comments

[Alibis of the Heart]

I like it^^
The scheme was quit good, and I do like how at the end you changed it. The symbolim throughtout the poem is really good too.
If you don't mind, would you check out my stuff? Thanks smile

[Galindafied1]

I did change it. XP You missed it. Toward the end it changed from A B A B to A B A A. XD

[Necro Fusion]

I personally loved it. Well put together and quite an interesting symbol to use as the opposite of what it really is meant to mean.
Good tip for anything else you write, though. Change up the rhyme scheme a bit. :3 There are some great poems that keep the same scheme fir every stanza, but some of the best change it, even ever so slightly

[XxFallen_CrowxX]

i like it very very true