Love (From my dad)

• Artist: Bleh Apocrypha
• Description: This took me AGES to come up with!
• Date: 12/13/2008
• Tags: love from

I was on my porch last night
The smoke sank into my skin
So I came inside to be with you
My dad was sick
My mom she cared for him
Her loving nursed him back to life
I ran away
I couldn't even look at him
For fear that one day he'd be gone
He grabbed my shoulders
And then he said
These last three years
I know they've been hard
But now it's time to go out of the desert and into the sun
Even if it's alone
I was on my porch last night
The smoke sank into my skin...

Comments

[Kiki Kitsune33]

I love how real this is, 5/5 I hope you win <3

[little_silver_wolf]

thats very cool
you are a really good writer ^.^

[Chahklat]

This is actually good, but still needs some work.

[elinares]

you are a really writer ,keep writing ,so i can read

[Arjoko]

i agree with those before me this is kinda confusing

[CazzyxBear]

Its alright, but you should edit it. its just confusing to read : ) better luck next time, 2/5

[Joe Elf]

Kind of confusing. Who did you come inside to be with? and what do you mean by go out of the desert and into the sun? I need some clarity on this. Pm me? If you will.