i want to see u smile.

• Artist: darksangel34
• Description: i wrote this when i was happy and heartbroken...soooo rate and comment!!
• Date: 12/20/2008
• Tags: want smile

if i could tell
you
why
i fell in love..
it'd be
for
that
smile
i
first
saw.
an essence of
an angel
or the
twilight
of the
morning
dawn.
it just might
be
the first
phase
of a cresent
moon.
can you
see?
this feeling
growing
my angel
has a halo
even though
it made of cellophane.

Comments

[xxunbreakable7xx]

lovely! :]
you rock my socks! haha.
i can say that cuz im yur cousin! mmwahahah!
oh yes world, be jealous!!! pahahahaha! biggrin

[darksangel34]

ok for future reference i dont want to be judged on my spelling but on how well i did it...ok?

[white horse93]

thanks for commenting mine smile loved it! like the others said though, spelling wasn't that good. still, 5/5 for the emotion and thought put into it. what is poetry but the rawest form of your emotions on paper? (or in this case, glowing screen, but whatever)

[Unworthy Misfit]

Ok, this is great only you misspelled some and you didn't uppercase the I's. 4/5

[Xxkaitlyn923xX]

nice smile

[Creepy Cute Pixie]

heart simply like that ^^ 4/5 only bad was the spelling ^^ But love it anyway biggrin

- Cate (Is a Failed Christmas Box)