Angels With Demons

• Artist: alien_emo_boy
• Description: Just do a really good rate!
• Date: 12/23/2008
• Tags: angels with demons

I think angels are wrong
They think of their own mind
Thinking that they are always right
But when that day comes
They will see, They will see how they made us cry and wish
That that day never should have came
I just hope they regret it
But they don't
Just like demons enjoy their own pride when we have questions
That should be answered, and right this minute.
Demons messes with our mind
They control us
They will not let go of our minds
Till they get a piece of our heart
You, right now should disagree too
We cannot go on living like slaves
I just hope you understand............

Comments

[l_Shamrock_l]

Very redundant and it doesn't have any passion. It doesn't seem like you made an effort to throw in any sort of poetic device either. It seems like you were trying to be poetic every here and there, but you're diction is far too casual for it to work. It would also help to use proper grammer: poor grammer makes it difficult to want to read a poem.