My Addiction

• Artist: A Taste of Fate
• Description: sorry, im not putting anymore descriptions. all i do is babble bout stuff in them anyway. (like now) so if u really want to know what theyre about pm me sometime. otherwise, i hope u like my poems! =)
  
• Date: 12/30/2008
• Tags: addiction

You're the one that I want
The one that I need
The one that hurts
The one that makes me bleed

You were always there
So why did you leave?
Now that you're gone
I can hardly breathe.

I can't stop crying
You broke my heart
I need you again
I'm falling apart.

I can't figure it out.
What happened here?
I can't go on
I want you near.

So please come back
I want the friction.
I need you close
You're my addiction.

Comments

[TheKhamaseen]

what is wrong with you morons? this writing is mediocre, and that's an extremely generous estimation.

Nice idea- but it comes off whiney. I want to see the pleasures of this addiction, and how the contrast makes you feel cold and cracking, like thin plastic freezing. the way you can't stop your fibers from splitting. and NO RHYMING. as it is now- 2/5
my god, nearly forgot, NO REHTORICAL QUESTIONS! it is the only thing worse than a rhyme scheme.

[tinkerbinker]

Nice, you did very well! Five out of five.

[f0rever-serenity]

very detailed and its great 5/5

[RanDOm_ChicK01111]

I love how you write about things that you never have experienced but its still really good.