Why?

• Artist: Mitchi19
• Description: I wrote this one day wondering why we suffer. (P.S. No I am not Emo.)
• Date: 02/04/2009
• Tags: fade

Looking out into the sky.
I question myself and wonder,
Why?
Why must the world be so cruel?
Why must we always fight to rule?
Why must we struggle to survive the day?
Why can’t the pain just fade away?

Comments

[Xxr and sXx]

that is .................awesome smile
you rock at poetry

[290DarkStars]

dude... she DID kimono! DUDE! YOU ROCK AT POETRY! this poem reminds me of a lot of my pieces of crap that i like to call "poetry". Maby you should chack my stuff out, after all... us people that gotta EXPLAIN to others that we arnt emo gotsta stick together mrgreen please post more! Im lov'n every one! God Bless.

[Mitchi19]

I didn't rhyme on purpose. It's a bit of a problem I have if I listen to music when I write. I get a beat and I just go.

[Kimono325]

Okay, I have to say it. I've said it so many times, it has to be said. The rhymes are holding you back. ENOUGH WITH THE RHYMES. To truly write good poetry (I've struggled with this for years, and still do), you have to take raw, unpolished feelings deep within your heart, and somehow..find the strength within you to take wordless emotions, and put them to words. Try to bring the words from your heart, and let them flow from within you. That's all the advice I can give you.