untitled for now

• Artist: sexy_dinosar_rawr
• Description: I was bored. Please tell me what you think the chorus should be. and I know, it's pretty lame so far. give me critisism!
• Date: 03/21/2009
• Tags: untitled

I'm running in the dark
I'm running alone
Trying to get out, but there's no exist
'short pause of singing'
This isn't what I meant
This isn't what I wanted
This is all too wrong, but there's no way back
'chorus'

Comments

[Vastrix]

i like it, i seemed to get a sense of it meaning something happening after death. Still very nice, would you be nice enough to comment on my beast poem? urz gets a 4/5

[sexy_dinosar_rawr]

thanks. im not sure wut else 2 write, and ya i dont need the goutes there, ill get rid of them

[Sunafire]

I don't really understand the things in quotation marks...
Oh wait I do, but they're really not worth putting in.
If this is meant to be a song you should add alot more to it smile
A good start though.