In Deaths Arms

• Artist: Pervy Sage Prodigy
• Description: Comment... I need feedback on all my work.. Don't worry about being negative.. I can take it, I'm a big boy.
• Date: 03/27/2009
• Tags: deaths arms

Your lips can bring darkness to my world
My eyes hold onto the light yours shine
Radiate the warmth to melt my cold heart
Bring my black soul back from the brink
Death will only take me if you are gone
So hold me close and hold me tight tonight
Whisper onto me the words that I long for
Will you save what is left of this man
Or am I destined to die here in your arms
The gloominess is just around the corner
Help me to stop walking around in circles
Whatever happens do not let me go to soon
Once I am there there is no coming back
My life is in your hands my life is yours
So hold me close and hold me tight tonight
My goddess of beauty what will you do to me
Grant me one last wish a simple kiss goodbye

Comments

[Yan Qi]

Not bad! ^^ 4/5 Only one complaint: The flow is a little off.

[bemymuse2nite]

lolz you do write emoly...

i like it. makes me wanna hug you. -hugs-

[Mythica_16]

Speeechless! It left me Speechless and I know good poetry when I read it!