The way I feel

• Artist: Joelundone
• Description: this is about, a guy who cant tell the girl how he feels.
• Date: 04/10/2009
• Tags: feel love rhyme crushing

Inside I'm dying,
I'm slowly fading away,
the way I feel about you
Is something I cannot say
Wanna scream it down the street
my feels are so incomplete
to you
Worse part about it,
You don't even know
Because the way I act
It doesn't show
that I love you
The days without are horrible
The days with you are worse
I just wish that your boyfriend
and my rolls were reversed
I'm crushing on you in pain
For you
I cannot obtain.
The days without you are horrible
and the days when your with him are worse
remember this poem
was yours, in every single verse

Comments

[Zyria Kaoru]

Your wording is great, for starters.
But more importantly, I would like to comment on the topic the poem speaks of. Even if you are scared of her boyfriend, tell her how you fell. Don't blurt it out, but let her know. Trust me, its better than going a lifetime thinking 'what if?'
Keep writing, and God Bless

[iloveblanketyblank]

Wait for the right time to tell her how you feel. Don't just blurt it out, either. Keep expressing your feelings through poetry or whatever form of writing you want - one day it could actually be worth something, especially if you keep practicing and get really good at it!! You're already on your way smile

[Chiyuki-san]

Friendly suggestion: try reposting in a more legible color. As it is, I can't read it. (And while you're at it, left-aligned poetry, rather than center-aligned, as you have it, is easier to read.)