Fear [Poem]

• Artist: II-Neon-Fox-II
• Description: This Is My First Poem I've Ever Written.
• Date: 08/29/2009
• Tags: fear

"Fear, It Hits You Like A Ton Of Bricks, It Stabs You In The Gut, It Fills Your Heart With Anger And Sorrow. If Not Treated, It Consumes You, Takes Over You. Soon, You Lose Sight, Of Everything. Then, And Only Then, Do You Realize Your True-Self.

Comments

[ThisIsMyDeathbed_x]

I like the general meaning - it's so true as well. MAybe you could work a little bit on the layout of the poem, and add character to it. I find that writing in 1st person adds more emotion to a piece of work as readers can relate. With a little work, this could be ace dude xd and wow, first poem? you've got some talent locked up in that head of yours mister! a little more practice and WOW. smile 4/5 anyways. read mines? xd (i'm a little dirty beggar, i realise sweatdrop )

[II-Neon-Fox-II]

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