alone

• Artist: Sullen blood lust king
• Description: comment if you want and if you dont it makes no difference to me, i proaly wont ever finish this so jus bear with me.
• Date: 11/03/2009
• Tags: alone

here i sit and wait.
my heart beats are late.
life slowly flees my grasp.
i wait for deaths chilling touch.
to release me from this living death.
i sit and stare into the never ending darkness.
woundering how long i will need to wait.
i close my eyes and release a long heavy sigh.

Comments

[bonjenko]

I like how the lines steadily get longer. It contrasts the writer's fleeting consciousness.
However, no offense, but this needs some more work. Some of the lines feel a bit cliched.