a warriors vow

• Artist: Kurotisuki
• Description: just a small poem i threw together after watching alot of anime lol xD
• Date: 11/27/2009
• Tags: warriors

chalenge me
if you wish
anger me
if you dare
threaten the lives of the ones i love
if u want to die
if you want to test me
ill show you how strong i can be
if you want to see how far i go till i break
you will regret what you find
ill attack with out hesitation
my blade will be the last thing you see
you wont have time to regret your choice
itl all be over to quickly for that
youl be falling on your knees
you didnt even see it coming
you never expected it of me
and thats where you signed your death
and u will lay down there
and die in a pool of blood
i wont look back
i wont clean my blade
crusted with the blood of others
you werent the first
you wont be the last
i wont show emotion
ill be far to gone for that
so go ahead
chalenge me
if you want to test me
attack me
if you think your better then me
anger me
if you dare
threaten the ones i love
if you want to die

Comments

[CyborgAdair]

This poem is nice, but it could be a lot better. I would suggest proofreading your work before you submit. (Make sure to use captials when necessary, and even more importantly, PLEASE make sure to use punctuation correctly. You may also want to get a spell checker if you don't have one.) Another thing you could work on is separating your poem into stanzas and making sure it isn't too repetitive. This makes it easier and more enjoyable for others to read. Hopefully that was helpful, lol.

[Deadlylight6]

this is nice, aparently Inferno doesnt know a thing bout poetry. unlike him i can see that its a FREE VERSE. no limitations, no constrictions, nothing to hold one back.

[Inferno Moonlight]

i don't think it's very good, you need to have capitalized letters, periods and commas. and you need to start your sentences with a different word than the same word 5 times in a row