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When you are distraught
With no where to turn to,
I'll be waiting.
I'll be waiting to see the turmoil
In your eyes, so I too
May feel your pain.
Just ask and I'll make
Your troubles disappear.
A simple hug and you
Will know that I care
And want to help anyway
Possible.
Keep me in mind,
I'll always be there
For you.
Why?
Because I am
Loyal,
Trusting,
Caring.
I am a friend.
Most of all, I am
Hope on white wings.
- by Deadlylight6 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/08/2010 |
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- Title: Hope On White Wings
- Artist: Deadlylight6
- Description: I wrote this for a dear frind who is going through a hard time for a relationship she doesnt want. so please, tell me wat u think i can do to improve this so I may help at least a little by easing her mind from her worries. i dont care for rate right now
- Date: 01/08/2010
- Tags: hope white wings
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Amayachi_Mika_Sayomi - 03/21/2010
- I really like it, but I can't quite find a rhythm? Well, maybe that's what you want. To each their own, I give it 4/5 smile
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- Deadlylight6 - 02/23/2010
- no im not a boy scout. just stating wat im am
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- Zurah - 02/21/2010
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Sweet, but the to in the first stanza isn't needed. Also, you're apparently a boy scout. Are you reverent and thrifty too?
(Hugs are a great AND thrifty way to make things better... Hmm...) - Report As Spam
- i i S i l v e r T e a r s - 01/12/2010
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I like it,
You're friend is luckyy to have someone like you there >w<
hehe 5/5 - Report As Spam
- x_xSlayer_of_Soulsx_x - 01/12/2010
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I think it's good. You should check mine out =)
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- Deadlylight6 - 01/11/2010
- comments anyone...really need them
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