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Patience withers like a flower.
Drooping slowly,
Even with the best of care.
Falling apart like petals
In slow succession
Leaving the steam bare.
In vain it reaches for light
For life, for substance.
On its last leg,
The final petal drops
And patience dies.
- by cantstopcrazy |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/12/2010 |
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- Title: ???
- Artist: cantstopcrazy
- Description: i wrote this think about a friend of mines indecision. im leaving the title line blank because i cant think one and would love if someone could help me come up with one. this is the most recent poem i have written and hope you like it.
- Date: 03/12/2010
- Tags: patience flower death wait nature
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Uriel Shadespire - 03/25/2012
- I think a nice simple title would be nice. Have you considered "Killing Patience"?
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- Chamomile Dream - 05/25/2010
- Very emotional, if a little cliché. four out of five stars.
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- Daily Night - 03/24/2010
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"Like The Falling Of A Petal"
That's what I'd like it to be called. - Report As Spam
- infinitexcode - 03/13/2010
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I really liked this piece of poetry! You have a real knack for writing, in my opinion. Now, I may not be a teacher, but I think you could get this published easily. Now, about the title. I think "Withering Away" would be good, but it is all up to you. Don't let me or anyone else stop your creativity.
Sincerly,
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