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Surgery
Take the silver scalpel in your small and shaky hands
Lay me on the table, my lifeless body, now
my skin, once warm, now just an empty vessel
put the blade to my chest, prepare to look inside
Tell me if my heart's still beating, or if its even there
your eyes dart to mine, looking for a soul
I'm barren land now, there's nothing left to find
Slicing through the skin, revealing organs and blood
these things meant to keep me alive
Just caused us all more grief
- by tear goddess |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/31/2010 |
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- Title: Surgery
- Artist: tear goddess
- Description: Erm, yeah, I'd rather not mention what inspired me for this one, but please tell me what you think and rate. =) As usual, tell me what you think I'm doing wrong/right. Love you all. =) <3
- Date: 08/31/2010
- Tags: surgery
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Comments (6 Comments)
- tear goddess - 09/07/2010
- Thank yoooooh!!! ^^
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- Delightful_Indigo - 09/06/2010
- It's okay. Your great for a person who just started.
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- tear goddess - 09/06/2010
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*writing
~please excuse any other typo/spelling errors. >.> - Report As Spam
- tear goddess - 09/06/2010
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Thanks to the both of you. =) I'll try that Green1Freak. I'm still learning a helluva lot about riting and all. =)
And Delightful_Indigo, thanks but its kind of something I'd rather not share. I only posted the poem because I thought it was slightly better than my other work, and decided I wanted to hear what others thought about the work, not the inspiration. =)
Thank you both. =) xo - Report As Spam
- Delightful_Indigo - 09/04/2010
- I liked it but I really wish I new what inspired you. Even if you have to PM me.
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- Green1Freak - 09/03/2010
- I like it a lot. Keep writing but maybe add a little more life and feeling? But otherwise it's really good.
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