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How I love the flowers
The reds, the blues
The whites and greens
Oh, the birds could sing for hours
Above me
They love me
And i guess i love them too
They dance the sky
They always knew
And who am i
To ask them why
I'll just silently envy
The way they fly
Like multicolored angels
- by Lady Maryam |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/02/2011 |
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- Title: spring time
- Artist: Lady Maryam
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- Date: 10/02/2011
- Tags: spring time
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- in a pinto forever - 10/02/2011
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I wouldn't say it's a poem so much as a melody in words. Bravo.
I rate on the basis of what aspects of your poem could be improved whilst keeping to your style. The poem the way it is is semi-simple, but the lines you have there are all perfect. The more I read it, the more the lines make sense together. There is nothing I can see to be improved upon. Mayhaps you will stumble upon this poem again in the future and say, Hmm, I want to add some more detail to this...
...but for now, a 5/5. - Report As Spam
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