Pain

• Artist: Oh you dont say
• Description: i wrote this in the middle of the night, sorry its so distubing. I'm not crazy I swear!
  oh feedback plz! constructive criticism would be nice :)
• Date: 11/06/2011
• Tags: pain fingernails machosist blood selfharm

My finger nails dig into my skin
The wet blood covers your hands
It seems like such a sin
a sensation you can barely stand
I chose pain on a whim

A sensation you embrace
A sensation you retrace
the cold touch of your hand
Brought back to no place and nowhere

Comments

[Kittycquariana]

Dark and original, however, like Enigmatic Mental Patient said, I would like to see some sort of feeling in it. 4/5

[DanteZephyr]

thank you for making my day by giving me a poem that is original. all day ive looked at very boring poems. in fact it has been 25 boring ones. you have made 4 good ones.5/5

[Sentimental News]

I like it a lot. 4/5
I would really like more, and I would like more feeling into it other than just action. Other than that it's really nice. If there was an option of picking 4.5/5 I would pick that.

[The Little Goblin]

OMG i love this poem... i'm a little dark and write stuff like that too...