Neww poemmm. [Constructive critizism wanted]

[Elegantly Mad]

You invite me with your enticing eyes,
Rested gently on the bed,

We close our eyes in the midnight wind
But, even that can't hide the truth,
Can't hide our love

You wrap your lovely wings around me,
Silver, in the dreaming moon's glow

Reality is so bold,
But easier to hide behind,
And much easier to forget

Our feelings were just
A word waiting to be spoken,
A boundry waiting to be broken,
A dream waiting to be revealed

We lose ourselves in the tempting night,
Are lost to a secluded place called Love;

Your name is whispered on the wind,
Your touch is interwined in the caresessing breeze,
Your voice is the nightingale's song

As the sun peeks over the horizon,
As the evanescence of our night
Deludes me,
I remind myself that goodbye is merely a phrase,
That once the stars smile upon us,
This dream will visit once again.

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Revision suggestions?  

[vamprisskat]

i like it really good  

[Elegantly Mad]

vamprisskat

i like it really good

Thank you!! Sorry it took me a year to reply. sweatdrop