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 Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2007 7:04 pm
A haiku, The Tree.
A tree standing tall,
Its branches streaking outward,
As it glows at dusk.
:End:
Yes, I wrote it. I don't even like it that much. Ha.
-Jaws
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2007 9:22 pm
It's good. To me, it actually forms an image of a lonely tree sitting on a squat hill with the rays of dusk casting trough its empty branches. In my mental image, the tree itself blocks out the sun and there is a blazing outline surrounding the tree as it casts its lonely shadow across the hillock. So yeah, it's kind of a nice image.
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 9:05 pm
Simple, yet it creates a strong image.
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