.hack//debreze my own fanmanga

[lazypockystick109]

Hello everyone...this is lazypockystick109 here blaugh ...and i am posting my fanmanga of .hack. Its actually my own seprate story line from the actuall .hack series but i wanted to work on a manga series me and my best friend is working on. Please read through it and comment any needs for it to be good...just don't be so offensive. I'm just wanting to find a way to make it better 3nodding Enjoy

.hack//debreze  

[lazypockystick109]

BUMP xp  

[Shialu]

There's no need to bump.

It looks like you spend a lot of time and energy on that comic 3nodding How long did it take you to make this?

I really like Spirit's design, but I think you could have made it more clear that he has the werewolf expansion on his character, especially if people aren't familiar with the Legend of the Twilight.  

[lazypockystick109]

Shialu

There's no need to bump.

It looks like you spend a lot of time and energy on that comic 3nodding How long did it take you to make this?

I really like Spirit's design, but I think you could have made it more clear that he has the werewolf expansion on his character, especially if people aren't familiar with the Legend of the Twilight.

well we were working on this since February of this month...and its still in the works right now. 3nodding  

[Legendary Twinblade Kite]

that was excellent!
Very well made. It was fun to read =)
I cant wait til you make more ^_^  

[Destry]

Ooh, super cute. <3 I really liked it.

Though I will (always will XD) say that generally it's a better idea to type out dialogue, words, etc. The handwriting is actually good and legible, but well, just a suggestion. d; It also looks cleaner.

The art style is adorable, and you did a wonderful job coloring. <3 I really liked it! Keep drawing/writing/er, you know. :D I couldn't draw a manga even if my life depended on it.  

[lazypockystick109]

Legendary Twinblade Kite

that was excellent!
Very well made. It was fun to read =)
I cant wait til you make more ^_^

yeah i can't wait to do more... wish it would go faster but my drawing ain't that fast  

[Atomu]

Aw, it's a really neat little comic. Lol, I envy your commitment; if I'd started a comic I probably wouldn't have finished one whole page.

Edit: I really like Z's design. biggrin  

[Puppetry]

:00 This is awesome, it must have taken a long time to do so many panels.

 

[lazypockystick109]

Harakibi

:00 This is awesome, it must have taken a long time to do so many panels.

yes it did take me a bit to get it right...though i've been working on mangas for awhile just that this one is the most pages i've done(i'm happy though)  

[lazypockystick109]

XxGrieverxX

Very nice. :0 Your coloring is amazing.

thank you...i've had lots of practice with coloring...esp trying to use the right material though i'll soon plan to change the cover  

[lazypockystick109]

Podkayne of Mars

Aw, it's a really neat little comic. Lol, I envy your commitment; if I'd started a comic I probably wouldn't have finished one whole page.

Edit: I really like Z's design. biggrin

its really hard to start on a comic...basicly because its hard to keep to that idea and not start on a new one...and yes z's design took awhile to get as well...i wanted to make everyones design different, which is a really tricky step to do  

[lazypockystick109]

AUGH I HATE WRITERS BLOCK!!!! gonk