This has been deleated. I want to work on it some more. I might put it back up.
Posted: Thu Jun 18, 2009 10:46 am
Well, you were right. There's definitely multiple mistakes. Grammar, and spelling. But I want to read more of this story. You've got me hooked! I wanna find out who Gera and Takira really are. They seem like they have something to hide. Oh! I'm also writing a book! It's a werewolf story, the oneI posted on here, Blue Moons Call, only it's all fixed up. Most of the errors are gone.
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Posted: Fri Jun 19, 2009 9:21 am
Only problem I have with it, thatI didn't already post, is that I get confused when you change the Point of View. You need to post, at the top of each change, who's point of view it is. Makes it a whole lot easier to read.
Posted: Fri Jun 19, 2009 2:43 pm
Mrs Gey
Only problem I have with it, thatI didn't already post, is that I get confused when you change the Point of View. You need to post, at the top of each change, who's point of view it is. Makes it a whole lot easier to read.