'`Crystal Dewdrops´'

[Kikisaur]

Hello! So one day I was stuck in the car. And I watched as the sun came after the rain. It was beautiful. Watching the shimmering dewdrops... well I came up with a story. Please dont post until i get my story down ^.^
thank you! this may take a while.

 

[Kikisaur]

We sit there. Me and you. On the grassy field. The endless sky stopped raining leaving its wetness everywhere. The crystals fall from the trees. Shattering. The dewdrops of water continue glistening. From above, you see a blinding light. You stare at it for a moment. You feel a striking pain in your eyes. I order you to look away. You obey. Good. I keep staring at you. Watching your every move. You catch my stare. You ask me if anything is wrong.  

[Kikisaur]

You ask if anything is wrong. I say nothing. The crystal raindrops continue driping off the thin leaves and petals. One shatters on your head. You laugh. I laugh. We sit there. Such fools we are. Acting like things are normal. Soon, I make my own crystal rain drops. Beads of warmth roll down my cheeks. Drip. Drip. Drip.Dr-- you catch one. You ask me again...if anything is wrong. My eyes look away. Avoiding your content, soft, handsom face...  

[Kikisaur]

I say nothing and look away. I look away to read your reaction. Worry...pain...curiosity...and a touch of sadness were the words that were written on your face. My eyes did not shut. I promise, I will never shut them. I stared at the blinding light in front of me...it was you. Unlike you, I did not feel the pain in my eyes. I felt it somewhere else. It was coming from inside my chest. My crystal heart...shattered. Just like the rain drops...glistening...  

[Kikisaur]

...beating...Suddenly, I feel caged. Embraced by two arms. I felt so caged in, yet free. You make me so comfortable yet so uncomfortable. Your fingers entangle in my black rich hair. I look up at you. You look down at me. You tell me to look away from the light. A laugh comes up from inside me. You smile. You are my light. I feel your petal thin lips meet my forehead. We sit there. I look at your face one last time and feel the stricking pain.  

[Kikisaur]

And I forever closed my eyes. Never opening. I feel your crystal dewdrops shatter on my content face. I whisper my last words and question you if anything was wrong. You say nothing. And our crystal drops continue to shatter with our glistening hearts. I whispered the three words. And weezed goodbye. We both say nothing.  

[Kikisaur]

ok im done! ^.^
any comments; edits; tips?
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[Kikisaur]

no one ? Dx  

[Blacksoul245]

Damn!That was realy good.Nicely done. 3nodding  

[Kikisaur]

»thankyou!!! ^-^  

[Ava850]

WOW! i was really tooken in. I like this and it was well writen great job smile
<3 Ava

 

[Kikisaur]

»aha¡ Thank you hun!  

[Ava850]

our welcome smile I posted your link on the frist page in the you should read these.. topic smile hope you dont mind
<3 Ava

 

[Kikisaur]

» omg! thx! its really that good!? -cries- xD  

[Ava850]

it is i love it smile