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 Posted: Tue Oct 06, 2009 9:03 pm
Well this is supposed to be lyrics, but I guess it somewhat counts as a poem. Tell me how you like it.
To the night I give my light, Show to me that which I seek
I wish to see the heavens, that reach so far above the skies.
My world is crumbling, as the days go by.
Give to me my faithful power, so that I may try to recover.
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Posted: Mon Nov 02, 2009 10:16 pm
I like it, but its kinda dry. You might wanna switch up the positioning of the verb and subject to have a twist to the phrases and how it rolls on the tongue
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Posted: Tue Nov 17, 2009 9:42 pm
i really like it. it reminds me of the night sky and a full moon. i say u could probably make a living out of it. do u have any more lyrics?
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Posted: Wed Dec 02, 2009 7:46 pm
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