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 Posted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 5:33 pm
This is a poem I wrote that won a contest and got published..Hope you like it! My Someone Just For Me
As I lay with you
arms entwined around eachother
skin on skin
heartbeat matching heartbeat
I know without a doubt
I've found what I've been looking for.
My someone just for me.
The one who completes me,
loves me, and will never leave.
The someone who understands,
never questions and knows.
Knows just what to say,
just what to do.
Who has given me love so true.
I have found my someone just for me.
Now I know I have learned to love
and will always be loved
in return.
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Posted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 5:37 pm
that's an amazing poem, bu it's too Chobits-based. The idea needs to be a bit more original.
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Posted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 5:43 pm
WOW I TOTALLY didn't even think about Chobits...lmao that's weird..I was thinking about my relationship when I wrote it XD lmao
Thank you for the input ^^ I wrote it back in 07...
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Posted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:24 pm
Verse and syllable rhythm is fine. The message is very nice.
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 5:19 pm
*claps* wonderful. your poems are good.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 12:16 pm
yours is awesome biggrin
Do you like this i am not good but its my first poem and i diddnt write anymore i made it in new year night
Please dont steal it
when i see you i smile when i miss you i cry
your like a butterfly in my heaven
that's why our love is forbidden
love is in the air that's why we care
when I'm with you i'm afraid i might lose my control
i think that for you, i would jump from the latest floor
when I know i can't have u i feel like im going to die
your like a angel flying above my sky.
i need u with me, and when i know i cant have you,
i start crying and praying, someday my dreams will come true.
my feelings for you are pure and real,
please believe me, this is what i really feel.
when u came in my life, it became sweet and happy,
imagining ur smile, put on a smile on me.
life got easy to live, with u stuck on my heart.
please keep shining above my sky, up there, ur the brightest star.
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