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Keeping in mind that I read this from your deviantArt page and thus the layout of the text might be different from one computer monitor to another, I offer the following corrections... Title - Eposode (Episode) Paragraph 1, 4th line, 4th word - writs (possibly wrists) Paragraph 4, 1st line, 15th word - hand (possibly handing) Paragraph 6, 1st line, 21st word - bored (???) Paragraph 6, 2nd line, 3rd word - toke (possibly took) Paragraph 11, 1st line, 9th word - greening (possibly gleaming) Paragraph 11, 2nd line, 20th word - pray (possibly prey) Paragraph 16, 1st line, 22nd word - flying (possibly hitting) Paragraph 20, 5th line, 16th word - here (possibly her) Paragraph 32, 1st line, 6th word - off (possibly of) Paragraph 33, 1st line, last word - pleated (possibly pleaded)
Overall, I liked the story. Other than the possible typos I listed above, I also noticed a few places that should have commas for proper pausing and a couple of missing "Article's" like "a", "an" or "the" as in paragraph 34 "...giving her quick kiss...".
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