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 Posted: Thu Mar 30, 2006 6:39 am
Depth
Here stands a broken man
with his head held low.
He believes a myth
that love can't show,
but still he tries
to send fear away
in the back of his mind;
it lives another day.
Hate is hell,
and life is love;
but in the depths of his hell
his spirit will rise above,
and still he fears
for that one day
when fate itself
will get it's way.
Hating life,
he takes the leap,
but only when the time is right;
when he knows he's in too deep.
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Posted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 7:57 pm
SeniorTwinkles Depth Here stands a broken man with his head held low. He believes a myth that love can't show, but still he tries to send fear away in the back of his mind; it lives another day. Hate is hell, and life is love; but in the depths of his hell his spirit will rise above, and still he fears for that one day when fate itself will get it's way. Hating life, he takes the leap, but only when the time is right; when he knows he's in too deep. Wow, I really like this one. It has alot of meaning to it.
keep up the great work.
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 10:23 am
Hey thanks a lot. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 8:50 am
It was moving, and right up there with the excellence of everything else I've seen of yours.
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Posted: Sun Jun 18, 2006 12:33 pm
It was good, but I would try not to force the rhyming aspect of the poem.
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