tell me what you think

[br00tulz]

its called "Delivery Boy" and its a football story. Its about a boy who plays center for a middle school football team. He is over wieght for his age so he plays with much older kids. He his tackled unfairly on purpose, called mean things and even beaten up becouse he tries to play. The story is about how he gets through and still plays the game and position he loves.

Ps: some of this material is based of of my own experinces!
PsPs: i never got beet up. xd  

[Parasitic Fetus]

Actually, I think it's a good idea. I'd like to read it, at least. sweatdrop I can't really speak for other people. If no one else likes it, write it anyway and I'll read it. 3nodding  

[MaisSkyss]

Your style better be extrodinarily good, because the storyline is very basic and has been done many times before.

Not to say you couldn't pull it off. Just don't fall into the typical plot line of first-I-was-unpopular-and-people-hated-me-and-now-I'm-popupar-and-people-love-me-and-I-don't-get-beat-up-anymore.

What a mouthful.  

[Lady Idril]

It sounds like it definitely has potential, but it is true that if you're not careful it could sound like too many other feel-good stories. But, then again, I'm usually the one to write feel-good stories so who am I to talk? xp Anyway would love to hear how you get on with it!