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 Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 2:08 am
Drifting, Floating- an impending disturbance
Drifting through the depths of joy,
Floating above the despair- impending disturbance
Thump, Thunder- A constant beat
Thump, the crashing of feet behind the walls,
Thunder, the sudden blast of deafening sound- constant beat
Crimes, Shrieks- A damaging effect
Crimes of pleasure behind the walls,
Shrieks of ecstasy radiating from the walls- a damaging effect
Creeping, Collapsing- Absolute peace
Creeping down to the lion’s den,
Collapsing on the dark cool linen- Absolute peace
what do you think?????
i really want comments
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Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 3:24 pm
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Posted: Mon Oct 23, 2006 2:15 am
Your usage of symbolism is extraordinary. It's a very deep poem. I enjoyed it greatly. There is much potential here. biggrin
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Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 6:03 am
PAKOofMM Your usage of symbolism is extraordinary. It's a very deep poem. I enjoyed it greatly. There is much potential here. biggrin why thank you... anymore comments anyone?
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