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 Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 12:08 am
::Something's Missing::
I feel that all
Are pushing down on me
I feel you all
Your hands on me
Why do you push
That which is different
Away with pride?
Am I that insignifigant?
Quit following the others
Join me
Be who you want to be
Show them that...
...That you're no liar
I feel it all
You pull on me
I can see it all
Your hands on me
Why pull me in
When you know
I'm ruined again?
Am I that unnoticed?
I'll never follow
Not now
All see me and smile a fake
But I know that...
That something's missing
Someone's missing the real me
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Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 11:08 pm
This is really good. I really like how your repetition of the 'your hands on me' line makes it stand out so much. It's very well done.
I was trying to insert something clever and useful here, but I really haven't any suggestions to improve it. It's very nice the way it is. Cheers!
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Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 4:19 pm
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