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OptimisticallyPessimistic
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 Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 3:40 pm
I look over the forest,
towards the last setting sun,
and my soul leaves this body,
this life is finally done.
My soul sprints on the wind
to leave on that fading light,
quickly, so very fast,
for soon it shall be night.
A purple curtain falls
over the golden shade
that drops my soul's heart:
it doesn't want to fade.
At last my soul reaches
the golden edge of the sky,
and all it can do is tear up:
one final, small cry.
The body, in it's last heat,
sees my soul crying: this is me,
and it smiles, through a last breath:
for once and all, at last I am free.
Man. That is powerful.
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Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 12:57 pm
Quite awe-inspiring. It took my breath away with it's beauty... and that doesn't happen very often. redface
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Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 3:51 pm
Wolfie Kid Quite awe-inspiring. It took my breath away with it's beauty... and that doesn't happen very often. redface Thanks so much!!! I love when I do something so right that it can do that to a person.
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 12:29 pm
What... so you mean you actually WANTED to stop people breathing? neutral Hmmm... (starts to edge away slowly) eek
Ahem, but seriously, I think it is deserving of a medal... if they gave out medals for poetry that is... eek
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OptimisticallyPessimistic
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 1:46 pm
Wolfie Kid What... so you mean you actually WANTED to stop people breathing? neutral Hmmm... (starts to edge away slowly) eek Ahem, but seriously, I think it is deserving of a medal... if they gave out medals for poetry that is... eek Lol no. I meant that I looked over the treetops towards the setting sun, my soul left my body, and escaped my life. So, with my last dying breath, I smiled.
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 1:53 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 7:20 pm
Great! mrgreen That's exactly what I was going for.
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