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A poem from a new member. "Trapped"

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clashkismet

PostPosted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 8:43 pm


There is a noise in darkness clear
Pounding at my deaf stricken ear
I haven't heard this sound before
Nor any other sound in years

It sounds like screaming
Like death and pain
Like someones trying to say my name

I try to go,
I try to run.
But it's too late
It's already begun

If I could save her
If I could leave
I'd sail away to the Seven Seas
Across the sand dunes of Egypt gold
I'd take her away from the desolate cold.
-K.J.V.




Please comment. So I can get some good feedback. I wrote this a long time ago, and I memorized it. So please tell me what you think.
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 4:30 am


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DAMN. That was soooooo good!!!!!! I loved it to death. It flowed just right; I can't find a single thing I'm not happy with. BRAVA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OptimisticallyPessimistic


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 12:27 pm


I think it's real good... it may even be better than my poems...


CURSE YOU!!! scream
PostPosted: Wed Feb 14, 2007 7:52 am


Crazy stuff. Good Job. Flow is almost perfect. (I don't know what perfection is.)

Lord_Skyy

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