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Scythes R Us

 
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:12 pm


Your tears are blue
My tears are red
Your tears are sorrow
My tears are dead
PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 4:49 pm



This poem is missing something. You have little emotion in the poem. You could maybe describe why your tears are red or what happened to make both characters cry. It's also a little bit too short for my taste.

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 6:37 pm


I thought it was really cute, but like Yo TeAmo said, it seems to be missing something...
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