I've probably rewritten the lyrics for this song three or four times. This is the latest and I changed the name from Colorblind to Potential. I'm very frustrated as of late with all the s**t I've been having to deal with and the fact that I can't express myself lyrically better. It's just not coming out it seems. Some opinions would be lovely. And I don't think it's finished yet. I don't remember.
I'd also posted this in the main poetry/lyric forum and didn't get anything. Just the usual "it's good" crap. It's not good! There are things that need to be done! But I just don't know what... AAARGH. I ask you, intelligent people for critique.
my face buried in red as i fall into the green
and all the color that i have never seen
i swim in the beautiful hues
of night, you paint me a mysterious blue
i dream with my headphones on
they pound in my ears great waves of black
the sound is something i could not have drawn
i find my player skipping yet another track
keep my breath held for the calm
I could disappear-
Appear in the grey (desperate)
Du bist Farbeblinde*
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
and i love my miss america from government nowhere
how many steps till i don't care
how many steps till i meet up with jack
before i get struck again from the back
you bastards - gravity got me again
I could stand before-
Mind your posture now!
Du bist Farbeblinde
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
purple haze washes away
and strips from me the grey
i can see all the colors in the faces of the queen and jack
but i can't take what's wrong with me back
I am simply just-
Keep your hips in line
Head up, shoulders back
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
(bunch of randomness insues - crazed, frantic)
Chin up!
Watch your feet! (chastising)
Sag mal! **
Somebody wake her up! (screaming)
Did Gravity get her again?
Keep the clock in check!
Is she even moving? (half-spoken/laughter)
Es ist jetzt Mitternacht! *** (desperate)
Somebody wake her up!
Get her up!
i am simply
colorblind
German translations
* You are colorblind
** Tell me
*** It's now midnight
I'd also posted this in the main poetry/lyric forum and didn't get anything. Just the usual "it's good" crap. It's not good! There are things that need to be done! But I just don't know what... AAARGH. I ask you, intelligent people for critique.
my face buried in red as i fall into the green
and all the color that i have never seen
i swim in the beautiful hues
of night, you paint me a mysterious blue
i dream with my headphones on
they pound in my ears great waves of black
the sound is something i could not have drawn
i find my player skipping yet another track
keep my breath held for the calm
I could disappear-
Appear in the grey (desperate)
Du bist Farbeblinde*
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
and i love my miss america from government nowhere
how many steps till i don't care
how many steps till i meet up with jack
before i get struck again from the back
you bastards - gravity got me again
I could stand before-
Mind your posture now!
Du bist Farbeblinde
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
purple haze washes away
and strips from me the grey
i can see all the colors in the faces of the queen and jack
but i can't take what's wrong with me back
I am simply just-
Keep your hips in line
Head up, shoulders back
I have the potential yet
No need for the upset
You are just-
(bunch of randomness insues - crazed, frantic)
Chin up!
Watch your feet! (chastising)
Sag mal! **
Somebody wake her up! (screaming)
Did Gravity get her again?
Keep the clock in check!
Is she even moving? (half-spoken/laughter)
Es ist jetzt Mitternacht! *** (desperate)
Somebody wake her up!
Get her up!
i am simply
colorblind
German translations
* You are colorblind
** Tell me
*** It's now midnight