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 Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 8:34 am
Look just don't remind me of everything I'm not or can not be;
I know who I am and what I'm worth.
Don't bring thoughts that will make me cry,
don't tell not to bleed when the tears stop coming
For Graeme, may you get the message loud and clear.
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Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 9:00 am
I take it this is aimed at someone you don't like. Well I won't ask: you don't have to share information if you don't want to. I think this is quite a strong poem, even if it's short. Sometimes, a long poem can take all feeling out of it. This one is very intense. Good work and good luck with whatever you want that person to do...even though it's none of my business...
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Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 9:29 am
I want him to know that I won't put up with his s**t for forever.
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Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 5:41 pm
I like this poem even if it was very short. Sometimes short poems are better than long ones. As long as they get the feeling/point across, short poems are good. I like how you didn't feel the need to rhyme. Most people think that a poem is not a poem unless it rhymes, but it's really needless in this poem. I know I have had a lot of those same feelings about someone in the past, and I hope that you will be ok even though that jerk hurt you. Believe me, no guy is worth hurting yourself over!
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