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 Posted: Thu Jun 21, 2007 7:54 am
These are some poems I wrote a while ago, the first one being about a friend I have on an RPG. The second being completely random.
A Hooded Stranger.
A Hooded Stranger cloaked in shadows,
Sidles through the door,
His stance is that of wariors,
His eyes as black as coal,
His face reflects no merriment,
His cloak is ripped and torn,
He seems so like a demon,
Who kills without remorse.
But looks can be deceiving,
Do you dare persue?
Could he be a fellow,
Just a tad misunderstood?
Love me.
Your listening,
But are you hearing?
Your looking,
But are you seeing?
Your there,
But do you care?
Hear me, see me, Love me!
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Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 9:55 am
I love the first one. Descriptive and enthralling. It really gets you to look at the subject matter. The second one is interesting. You did very well with it for it just being random.
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 1:39 pm
I liked both, but I did see that "warriors" in the third line of A Hooded Strangers was missing an "r" and that you repeatedly misspell "you're" in Love Me. The way you spell it, "your", is possessive; you need "you're", the contraction for "you are". Things like that happen all the time, so it isn't really your fault. We all make mistakes. Other than that, both were very entralling poems, and I loved them. smile
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