ASURA highschool

[King Phar]

well here is my idea a high school on a location that is not only the high point of a war but also a strong area of magic you can make a profile or not and basic rules apliy am i going to complain if you don't follow them no it is just a idea.  

[Krusadin]

((Ok!))
A mysterious looking girl walked in to from the gates of the school. She had a long swallowtail jacket over her school uniform and her black hair covered the most part of her face. She was also wearing a large, black top hat and a long, bright green scarf that flowed behind her as she walked. She stopped to pick up a buttercup and then she ripped it in pieces.

((Yeah, pretty random, but hey!))  

[Krusadin]

(Ok, here's your feed back! Just write Asura with capital letters and put a highschool instead of just high. And leave out the word: "idea")  

[Wacram Glaziuz]

Krusadin

((Ok!))
A mysterious looking girl walked in to from the gates of the school. She had a long swallowtail jacket over her school uniform and her black hair covered the most part of her face. She was also wearing a large, black top hat and a long, bright green scarf that flowed behind her as she walked. She stopped to pick up a buttercup and then she ripped it in pieces.

((Yeah, pretty random, but hey!))

*Logen, the snowtigerhuman, was something some bullies used to call her, but now the one's in her class called her a murderer, she didnt know what she had done the day they all suddently dissapeared, but in her dreams she had eaten them all up, with bones and everything*  

[Krusadin]

(Angsty!)
The girl swooped her top hat off when she walked past Logen and put it back on again. She had green stripes in her hair.
The bell rang to start the first schoolday.  

[Wacram Glaziuz]

Krusadin

(Angsty!)
The girl swooped her top hat off when she walked past Logen and put it back on again. She had green stripes in her hair.
The bell rang to start the first schoolday.

*Logen said before the late teacher came intoo the classroom*

"hello there"  

[Krusadin]

The girl nodded but didn't really answer. She put her hat in her schoolbag and pulled out her books and notes. She took a pen from behind her ear
and started drawing on the cover of the notebook.  

[Wacram Glaziuz]

Krusadin

The girl nodded but didn't really answer. She put her hat in her schoolbag and pulled out her books and notes. She took a pen from behind her ear
and started drawing on the cover of the notebook.

*Logen took some notes and sighed, thinking: "i will never get any friends in this pace"*  

[Wacram Glaziuz]

*when she thought that, a single tear formed in her left eye, though the girl she had spoken to sat to her right*  

[Krusadin]

The girl had finished off with her drawing. She lifted her notebook up and on the light green cover Logen saw the words:
"Nice to meet you. This is my name"
She had drawn a very realistic lily in just matter of seconds.  

[King Phar]

walking in a teen the age of about 17 walked in he was about 6,5, not muscular, had a mask that covered his face it was white, with lines on it that seemed to change from where you looked at it, sckool untiform of black pants and white dress shirt for men on with a tie on the collar. walking in he saw logen crying he walked over to her squatted down and said "are you ok?"  

[Krusadin]

After seeing te boy, the dark girl quickly hid her drawing.  

[King Phar]

turning to her "i can care less what your drawing do you know what made her cry?"  

[Krusadin]

The girl looked at the boy behind her thick black hair. Her eyes couldn't be seen and she didn't answer. Then she just continued drawing into her notebook.  

[King Phar]

"ok." takes a seat behind logen.