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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 7:31 pm
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 8:38 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 7:56 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 7:59 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 9:57 pm
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 7:50 pm
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WARNING: Before reading on, keep in mind that the flow of the following poem is very poor. I don't normally write rhyming poetry, but I decided I should give it a shot.
Now here's the thing about my poetry, I'm not one of those people who gets really into it. Sure, I've written a poem every day for the past 24 days or so, but I don't really go back and do a lot of editing. I'm not a "perfectionist" so to speak. So while my poetry may get better over time (so long as I have some sort of inspiration), I'm not going to try to make every poem perfect.
I'm human, just like everyone else, and I doubt anybody makes a perfect poem with a perfect flow that inspires people everywhere during their first run. As I haven't done any rhyming poetry in a VERY long time, I consider this a first-run.
So take the poem in stride, if you like it, you like it. If not, I can't really blame you, but don't go flapping your lips about how terrible it is, I already know.
Friends, Lovers, Friends The candles flame flickers and dies As she sits in the chair, a tear in her eyes He said he was sorry again and again And had no idea how this could begin
It was a while ago that those two had met On all hallows eve dressed, he couldn’t forget Their eyes had chanced upon each others And from that moment on the two had been lovers
Countless tender moments that now had been shorn Their relationship strained, frayed, and torn And somewhere beyond a long time from now Perhaps things will mend, but I don’t see how
And so as all good things, it comes to an end And the two stay together each as a friend And yet every time he looks at her smile He remembers them as two, and thinks a while
EDIT: I should make a note that I don't have a problem with constructive criticism, I just don't take well to mindless insults. If anyone wishes to make any suggestions, I welcome them. I won't make a promise that I'm going to change something just because someone makes a suggestion, but I will certainly take it into account for future poems.
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